Okay bud here's some tips and stuff. The overall volume is a bit too low, if you turned down the master volume I can recommend that you keep it at 100%. Your idea is definitely not bad, but the sound design could have been better. Also at 1:25 everything changes? I like how it sounds but it is like a totally different song. What I want to say with this is that it changes too quickly.
I hope this could help you a bit and good luck with your future songs :)